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Trying my hand at some fic. Unedited, sorry for that!
Title: Grief's Conversion
Author: Duckie
Rating: PG-13 (for semi-graphic violence and mature situations)
Warnings: Set post 'The Reichenbach Fall' so implied spoilers out the wazoo. TW for talk of death and morbid dream descriptions!
( The war was in color... )
Author: Duckie
Rating: PG-13 (for semi-graphic violence and mature situations)
Warnings: Set post 'The Reichenbach Fall' so implied spoilers out the wazoo. TW for talk of death and morbid dream descriptions!